Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age to either study or work in another city. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people?
Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience.
☑ 问题 Question: Advantages vs. Disadvantages
☑ 人物 Who: Young people
☑ 事件 What: Leave home, study or work
☑ 时间 When: At an early age
☑ 地点 Where: In another city
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In recent times, it is a common trend that young people leave home at an early stage to study or work in another city. This trend is becoming more popular amongst young people because it has a number of benefits in doing so. I firmly believe that this has more advantages for young people, such as broadening one’s perspective in the working world and also allowing them to experience different cultures.
Traveling out of the city and getting out of a person’s comfort zone is proven to be one of the quickest ways to pick up new skills and even values. Young people who travel to study or work in another city are able to broaden their perspectives quickly as they have to adapt quickly to make the most out of it. For example, when a construction worker leaves his city to work on another project, he may be exposed to more economical and innovative approaches which he is able to then add into his repertoire.
Secondly, when young people move out to study or work in another city, they are also exposed to other cultures which may allow them to develop different values. Learning from other cultures apart from their own will enable them to appreciate the little things which they may have taken for granted.
In conclusion, it can be seen that leaving home at an early stage to study or work brings about numerous benefits such as the reasons above. Therefore, I strongly believe that there are more advantages than disadvantages for younger people to travel to another city for educational or employment reasons.
☑ Leave home at an early stage to study orwork in another city
☑ Traveling out of the city
☑ Move out to study or work in another city
☑ Travel to another city for educational oremployment reasons
☑ exposed v. 暴露，揭露（expose的过去分词）
☑ adapt vt. 改编；使适应 vi. 适应
☑ amongst prep. 在…之中；在…当中（等于among）
☑ broaden vi. 变宽，加宽；扩大，变阔 vt. 使变宽；使扩大
☑ comfort n. 安慰；舒适；安慰者 vt. 安慰；使（痛苦等）缓和
☑ economical adj. 节约的, 节俭的, 经济的
☑ innovative adj. 新发明的, 新引进的; 革新的; 有改革精神的
☑ numerous adj. 很多的, 许多的
☑ repertoire n. 全部节目，全部的能力